Have you ever
thought about your nightmares? The screaming horrors of the night that leaves a
person standing up, stiffly straight with beads of sweat framing their face.
The grotesque creatures that haunt our dreams; the vivid imagery that then
prevents us from sleeping, making us jump out at every shadow that moves.
Elsie's head nodded
off, before she jerked up again, sliding her back against rough texture of the
tree to rest her head tiredly upon her knees. Raising her head after a few
minutes, she peeked around to look at the large creature that resembled a
tattered dragon grazing on her mother's petunias. Shit.
Her mother was not going to be particularly pleased. Although Elsie had often
fought bravely against these creatures in her dreams, she realised that it must
honestly be harder to so in reality.
The look in his eyes
were hard, as if he'd seen so much that he wouldn't even hesitate to dismember
her if she did as much as disturbed him.
She had been woken
up by an irritating growl at one in the morning and in annoyance, she swatted
her arms in the general direction of the source, hitting something scaly. Her
senses grew alert as she heard a warning snarl before the creature swung its tail
at her at a ferocious speed. Following her instincts, she rolled off the bed
landing awkwardly on the floor and moaning in pain. She'd landed on her elbow,
causing the pain to stretch through her body to the very top of her spine. The
dragon, satisfied that the creature that attacked him had disappeared from
view, ducked out of her room, smashing its head multiple times against the low
windows.
And she'd followed
it which had been a bad mistake but swearing that she'd seen it before in her
dreams, she went after it, hiding behind a tree to observe the creature lazing
around in her backyard.
Taking a deep
breath, she crept up behind him armed with an array of objects; pencils, books
and a spade. As soon as she stepped forward however, a leaf crackled alerting
the mythological being to her presence. He turned, glaring at her and
identifying her as his assailant who had tried to kill him as soon as he had
escaped her mind.
She held her hands
up, her weapons clattering to the harmlessly. Extending a leg hesitantly, she
swept them away behind her, hearing the clattering of the pencil as they
continued rolling. The spade took a bit more effort but the dragon stood there,
unblinking and patient - eyes softening to show the span of his life.
"I'm
Elsie." she spoke slowly and clearly. "I - er - you woke me up. I am
sorry for apologising to you but may I ask you a question?"
He looked back at
her, regarding her unflinchingly.
"I dream of you." She blurted out, feeling foolish. "I fight you in my dreams and I vanquish you. All the time."
"I dream of you." She blurted out, feeling foolish. "I fight you in my dreams and I vanquish you. All the time."
'That's because you're in a dream, you human. If we
were to battle now, I'd win with my wings tied and my eyes closed. And a meal
in the end, too.'
She paled, the blood
rushing out of her face as she scanned the creature. "Did you just talk to
me?"
'Telepathic abilities.' The dragon snorted, a
warm gust of air shuddering through the vegetation. 'Stop being a fool, girl.'
She attempted to
stammer out a reply, but she then closed her mouth audibly. "How did you
come from my mind?"
'I escaped. You've imprisoned me for far too long and
I sensed that something was wrong with your world. I'm here to resolve this
issue. If you attempt to stop me, I will have no choice but to kill you.'
"Escaped from
my mind?" She asked unbelievingly.
He nodded, rolling his eyes and turning away, obviously dismissing her shivering figure.
He nodded, rolling his eyes and turning away, obviously dismissing her shivering figure.
"And what's
wrong with my world?"
'What do you think?' He asked sarcastically. 'Just look at it. You can't see the stars glistening
anymore, not as bright as they used to be. The moon's almost fading away as
well. Soon enough you idiotic beings will be able to block out the sun, killing
yourselves and the millions of species that depend on you for their
survival.'
She raised an eyebrow. "Are you always this rude?"
She raised an eyebrow. "Are you always this rude?"
'I tell you about the impending doom of this world
and you only bother to correct my mannerism. How typically...human.'
"I am human, I
hope you realise."
'Exactly. And there isn't any capacity within those
puny brains of yours to understand what is going on. You've been seeing more of
us these past few days, Elsie but you've dismissed them as shadows. How boring
it must be to be human. How dull. How do you survive not being fantastic?'
"You - er - the
dr- dragons?! Wait a second, so you're saying that you've purposely come out in
front of me. That's what I'm inferring about your speech at least." Elsie
huffed indignantly, refusing to answer his insult with another in kind.
'We need you, unfortunately. You and a select few
others. You'll be riding these creatures into the atmosphere in an attempt to
rid this world of the pollution that you idiots have caused.' The dragon
scowled impertinently, looking up into the sky. 'Here
they come now. Make your decision, human. If you're with us - you'll always be
safe but if you're not, there is a big chance that you may die. Like a human
does.'
"How old are
you?" she interjected anxiously, indeed discovering the flying creatures
in the night air.
'None of your business. Are you in?'
She looked at her
house helplessly, thinking about her warm bed that beckoned to her with
tendrils of urge and desire. Scrunching her nose, she made a choice that would
change her life forever.
"I refuse to
come."
The dragon bowed his
head regally, making sure of eye contact. 'Your
wishes, as per usual. Selfish as usual.'
"Shut up."
She shook her head at the dragon. "You don't know anything; just be
quiet."
'Only for her majesty,' were the last few
words she picked up before the dragon was gone with a whoosh of his wings. The
air battled her hair around, refusing her the right to see in what direction
she was headed in. By the time, she was able to see properly again, the dragon was
no longer there.
Her stupid
nightmares were the cause of all this. Damn it all.
Hope it's all right. Thanks for reading.
Allons-y!
Sorry, sorry I didn't comment- I've been super busy yesterday, and, well. yeah.
ReplyDeleteThat was fucking impressive that was.
How did you think of this? 'but the dragon stood there, unblinking and patient - eyes softening to show the span of his life.' This I really liked. Like reallllly liked. It showed signs of humanity even though it wasn't human at all. It was my favorite line, actually.
The characters (well, elsie) felt pretty relatable, and most people would have done what she had done- I wouldn't though. It's a freaking talking dragon.
Err- I found a couple of mistakes:
'Telepathic abilities.' The dragon snorted ----> 'Telepathic abilities," the dragon snorted. There are other sentences with the same errors but they were pretty similar to that example. Always use a coma instead of a period. You use a period if that's the end of the sentence itself like:
"You're a monster," she hissed, willing herself not scream. The being only shook his head, unaffected by her weak insult.
"I suppose I am, in a way."
I hope you understood that, because I can barely understand my own example.
Other than that everything seems to be sound, grammar and structure wise.
You should build on this, you know. Seems pretty interesting. Now I have to write shit about snowflakes- lates!
That's alright! I just realised how stupid the spacing is so apologies for that, but I'm actually spacing out correctly.
ReplyDeleteAhaha, thank you! But I just read over it and it sounds off. I don't know what's happening to my writing. It's just not working out as good as yours do.
asdhajkhad. Make it work.
With those mistakes, ho-hum, I agree with you about the commas. I've had people mislead me about that all my life. Glad that someone's finally clarified.
Dear god. Now you're going to think I'm this absolute idiot. I am literate, trust me. I know how to edit, my punctuation is normally astoundingly brilliant.
Modesty is also my specialty. But you get my point. I'm not an absolutely idiot.
Yay, ahaha. Snowflakes, indeed - you're right. Hmm.